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Ann Collins's avatar

The train is a strong image of the way life can line-up behind a single decision. The poet reminds us of how limiting a "one-track mind" can be.

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Nathan Slake's avatar

Do you think the formatting leans into this idea, too? A singular line of text running vertically, almost, each so narrow.

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Ann Collins's avatar

Definitely. A train of words. I love the way line breaks and white space can help shape the thoughts inside a poem.

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Nathan Slake's avatar

Yes, it's a thing I'd love to read more about, knowing little about poetry. I'd love to hear more on how much the actual formatting plays a role in constructing some poems.

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Brian Funke's avatar

If it’s done well, definitely impactful. And I think this poem is a good example. I think there are many examples where it feels distracting though. Of course what is “well” for one is “distracting” for another, so….

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Weston Parker's avatar

I think that the format of a poem can have a strong impact on the interpretation and the impression it leaves you with. I have written a few essays on poetry if you’re interested.

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Ann Collins's avatar

Yes, please! I’d love to read what you’ve written.

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Weston Parker's avatar

Ann, If you read these essays, you will notice some repetition of details and for that I apologize. One day I hope to put together a book on writing poetry and when I do there will be EDITING! Here are six essays on writing poetry. I have another one coming out this month.

https://westonpparker.substack.com/p/on-writing-poetry

https://westonpparker.substack.com/p/sunday-essay-on-publishing-and-poetry

https://westonpparker.substack.com/p/prose-on-poetry-2

https://westonpparker.substack.com/p/essay-on-writing-poetry

https://westonpparker.substack.com/p/this-is-an-essay-on-one-aspect-of

https://westonpparker.substack.com/p/tantrums-and-editing

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Ann Collins's avatar

Wes, thank you for gathering these links to your essays. I have compiled them into a single Word document, and I'm getting ready to dive into your wisdom. This feels to me like a mini-workshop--just perfect for an early Saturday morning! 🤗☕️

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Weston Parker's avatar

Thank you for making such an effort. Poetry, and poetry writing is such a personal thing that I wonder if one person’s point of view has much use for others. It’s entirely possible that my process would be utterly baffling for someone else.

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Ann Collins's avatar

Wes, I can't thank you enough for sharing these essays! I have learned so much from you this morning--beautiful and nourishing lessons.

Here's (a small part) of what I think I heard you saying:

A Poet is a listener and a scribe, who is humble, wide open, and curious to hear a truth that wants to be found and shared. The Poet is building a Lock with the hope that the Reader will want to make a Key. This Key unlocks a place inside oneself--a soft place--that was hidden to both the poet and the reader. And this is a place of connection--a good poem "pierces our armor, eases our loneliness, and makes us certain we are all brothers and sisters."

Does this sound right, Wes?

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Ann Collins's avatar

Nathan, I’m a beginner, too. Like you, my brain has been formed in the sciences. When it comes to poetry, I just know what I like :) I love words and the potency of words. Someone said that poems are the “shapes that thoughts come in.”

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Weston Parker's avatar

That’s a good poem. Because of our largely unrealized lives I would change the last word to “realized”

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Brian Funke's avatar

Oooh, interesting!

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